- Hugo gives in to the temptation, common in writers of historical fiction (including myself), of “showing off” his research. I studied it, I think it’s interesting, so I’m going to tell you everything I know. This is a serious mistake, certainly for me, but even for Victor Hugo. (see ‘The Year 1817’ p. 119)
* “don’t do” in Les Miserable by Victor Hugo
Posted by Lew Weinstein on January 23, 2009
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* “don’t do” in Club Dumas by Arturo Perez-Reverte
Posted by Lew Weinstein on January 23, 2009
- transitions. (185-86) the reader is suddenly transported from Fargas’ home in Portugal to Paris, with no transition. The details of this change of scene are presented later (187-88). Does this work? I don’t think so. It’s a technique similar to what Tolstoy does repeatedly in Anna Karenina. Ah, crticizing Tolstoy – heresy!
- exposition. long, detailed descriptions and lists of old books, which the reader can’t possibly read and absorb. what is the purpose?
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* “don’t do” in Stein on Writing by Sol Stein
Posted by Lew Weinstein on January 23, 2009
- avoid anything that distracts from the reader’s experience even momentarily
- don’t over-characterize a minor character, making the reader think he is more important than he is; select one memorable characteristic that distinguishes this character from the rest of humanity and let it go at that
- don’t present characters who are either all good or all bad. It’s not believeable. show the contrasts. for example … suggest a character’s vulnerability before that character exercises power, or show a character’s strength before that character is hurt physically or emotionally
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** A Good Conviction … blurbs
Posted by Lew Weinstein on January 20, 2009
BACK COVER BLURBS …
Judge (ret.) Leslie Crocker Snyder, former Manhattan Assistant District Attorney, first sex crimes prosecutor in the U.S.: A Good Conviction is a well written, well paced, and fascinating tale of prosecutorial abuse in the Manhattan DA’s office. Makes one wonder how many other times something like this has occurred and just how high the abuse is actually sanctioned
Michael Radelet, one of the authors of In Spite of Innocence, a study of over 400 cases of persons wrongly convicted of crimes carrying the death penalty.: A Good Conviction is an unusually gripping story of an erroneous conviction and the passionate fight to correct that injustice. Weinstein’s account of what a bad prosecutor does to Joshua Blake provides a frightening and realistic parallel to many of the true life cases we documented in our study
Dan Slepian, network producer of many crime and legal news shows: Having spent countless hours working with detectives, courts, attorneys, and wrongly convicted inmates I was most impressed with how well researched and accurate your narrative was. You really nailed it. In addition, it was a great read.
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** A Good Conviction – prologue
Posted by Lew Weinstein on January 20, 2009
Sing Sing Correctional Facility … Wednesday, January 21, 2004
Disjointed memories haunt me, as they do every night, shattering my once great expectations and leaving me to share a cold clammy cell listening to a guy named Spider jerk off.
The darkness emits a rumbling undercurrent of sounds, pierced randomly by eerie howls. Inmates yell obscenities to one another, or worse, to no one. Doors clang, footsteps echo and fade away, angry music blares in short bursts. Odors of urine, decaying food, stale smoke, and sweaty unwashed bodies assault the air. Mice and roaches scurry.
The longer I’m here, the harder it is to imagine being anywhere else. Giving in and allowing myself to cry would be suicidal. Others would observe my fear, and act on it. Predatory others. “Hey, white boy, they gonna’ love you’ ass in here.”
How long before I lose my mind? And will that be better or worse? Is it already happening? Every day, the person who was Joshua Blake recedes further from reality. Is this process irreversible? Will there be a point when I can never again be who I was?
There’s a sudden movement close to me and I cringe. I’m going to be hurt. Relief. It’s just my cellmate, stirring in the bunk below me. The fact that his presence is actually comforting shows how much my life has changed. Spider rolls out of his bunk and slides into view.
In the dim light, I make out hairy legs, dark crotch, gray prison shirt. He settles his muscled bulk onto the toilet. More sounds and smells. When he’s done, I roll off the upper bunk, take his place, feel his sweat. I remember what it used to be like in a bathroom with a door and a seat on the toilet.
I climb up, careful not to step on Spider’s arm, crawl under my thin blanket, shiver in the chill. Spider’s bulk shifts in the bunk below me. He settles into a slow steady rhythm which pulses my bunk as well as his. Spider is once again masturbating.
I strain for diversion. A familiar burr grinds at the edges of my mind. I force myself to focus, visualizing each distinct moment of my arrest and trial. I see a look in a man’s eye. I grab for it, but once again it slips away, and I’m sinking, gasping, a deep eternal coldness filling my body.
Spider finishes with a grunt and a sudden lurch just as I slide into my personal bottomless lake of despair. Deep in the murky water, the man’s face reappears, staring at me intently, a puzzled expression in his eyes.
And – finally – I know the face.
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** The Heretic – read the Prologue
Posted by Lew Weinstein on January 20, 2009
“No. Don’t go out there,” she pleads. “You stay inside,” he orders. She shouts to her son. “Run! Get your father. Hurry!”
She follows her father-in-law to the door, horrified by what she fears will happen. The old man reaches the street just as the first of them come around the corner. He walks straight at them — they shrink back — the crowd has not yet gained the courage to attack one who is not afraid. They shout.
“Jewish pig! … Christ killer! … Devil worshipper!”
He raises his hands, and surprisingly, the crowd quiets. “Why do you call me Jew?” he says softly. “I’m baptized just as you.”
“Liar! We know what you converso Jews do. You don’t work on Saturday, and you don’t eat pork. You just pretend to be Christian.”
“That’s not true. I gave up the Jewish religion long ago. I wet my head in your baptismal water and I’ve been a good Christian ever since.”
He smiles, laughs almost, knowing they are not convinced, that nothing he says will ever change their minds. But he is not afraid. He stands taller. He is eerily calm. “You say I’m a Jew. Why? I don’t pray to the God of Israel. I go to church and take the sacraments. My son is not circumcised.”
He turns away. They follow. He spins to face them. It is time, after so many years. Time to be a Jew. “Is this what you want?” he thunders. Deliberately, he places his high crowned hat on his head. He tugs under his cloak and removes a long white scarf, the Jewish prayer shawl, the tallit. He holds it solemnly in front of him, aged eyes straining to see faded words. He prays silently, in Hebrew: “Blessed are You, O Lord our God, King of the Universe, who has sanctified us by Thy commandments, and has commanded us to wrap ourselves in tallit.”
He raises and twists the tallit. The pure white fabric unfolds, soars majestically and lands gently on his shoulders. He lifts it to cover his head. His face is hidden. He closes his eyes tightly. He is in another place. He prays, she thinks, for the years he has lost, and perhaps also for the years ahead, though not for him: “O God of Israel Who desires repentance, allow me to repent for the foolishness of my baptism. O God of Israel Who forgives, forgive me for willfully discarding Your commandments. O God of Israel Who redeems His people, accept me, and allow me once again to walk in Your ways.”
He raises his voice, knowing the effect the strange sounding Hebrew words will have.
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“Hear O Israel, the Lord our God,the Lord is One.”
The crowd gasps. Swords are raised.
“Jesus of Nazareth is not God!” he shouts. “There is only one God, and He is the God of Israel!”
The first sword explodes against the side of his head, knocking his hat to the ground. A second shining blade slices into his shoulder.
Bloodied, he does not fall. He says the Hebrew words slowly, powerfully. “Blessed is the Name of His glorious Kingdom for all eternity.”
The bloody sword flashes again, and he smiles, the last act of his life.
Now they all find courage. They know how to stomp on a dead man. Clubs and stones obliterate his features. Stabs to his chest. His tunic dark red.
She hears the horses a split second before the mob looks up. Her husband runs into the square, six armed men behind him. The mob retreats, its anger spent. He wraps the body of his father in his cloak, cradles the corpse gently in his arms, walks slowly into the house.
The young boy bends to retrieve his grandfather’s bloody tallit from where it has fallen.
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“point of view” in Eye of the Needle by Ken Follett
Posted by Lew Weinstein on June 1, 2007
· omniscient narrator, able to show the inner feelings of all the characters · at least once the narrator speaks in his own voice … (beginning of Ch 3) … “Faber … Godliman … two-thirds of a triangle that one day would be crucially completed by … David and Lucy” … the narrator thus provides a foreshadowing, setting the stage and piquing the reader’s interest.
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“pace” in Eye of the Needle by Ken Follett
Posted by Lew Weinstein on June 1, 2007
· Follett’s purposeful ping-pong structure alternating between the characters forced him to slow down to show (in his words) “how the protagonists were reacting to each other’s moves,” and to include more enriched attention to “character, landscape and emotion.”
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* historical fiction … in Eye of the Needle by Ken Follett
Posted by Lew Weinstein on June 1, 2007
- Follett starts with a one page historical preface about the D-Day deception. He ends the preface … “That much is history. What follows is fiction. Still and all, one suspects something like this must have happened.”
- the high stakes of blowing the deception plan are emphasized several times … Godliman: “If one decent Abwehr agent in Britain gets to know about Fortitude … we could lose the fucking war.”
- But of course we know that D Day was successful and we didn’t lose the war.
- Follett creates tension about an event where we know the actual outcome, ie that Faber cannot succeed.
- Much like Forsythe in Day of the Jackal (published in the early 1970s, before Eye of the Needle), where we know that De Gaulle was not murdered by a sniper but are carried into great tension anyway.
- Perhaps the tension is maintained because we don’t know if Faber will fail, or if he will succeed but Hitler doesn’t act on his knowledge. However, we are told repeatedly, by Hitler himself, that he will be guided by Faber’s report.
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“character” in Eye of the Needle by Ken Follett
Posted by Lew Weinstein on June 1, 2007
· Faber is of course the villain. But he is also patriotic, enormously competent, and capable of feelings, which he must repress in order to carry out his mission. He is an wonderful lover, which he could not be if he were truly without feeling, no matter how much he will not allow himself to express it. This complex character must be admired even as we hate and fear him. A remarkable achievement. · Lucy starts out as a dominated young woman, who chooses to escape to her father-in-law’s island rather than live among people. But in her relative solitude, she develops an unexpected resolve, and when facing the ultimate challenge, she rises to it. Is what she does believable? Maybe not, although in wartime people do extraordinary things. In any case, Follett portrays this larger-than-life character in a way that arouses the reader’s emotions as we root for her to succeed against overwhelming odds. The final scenes and epilogue drew tears from this romantic reader, always a sucker for melodrama. · Godliman (what a name! I’d like to know where Follett found it) is the enabler of the story, providing the narrative links that eventually lead Faber to Lucy. But how much better to provide these through an interesting character than through narrative prose. Godliman’s growth from nebbish professor to razor-sharp spycatcher is done a little quickly. We can believe it, but we would like to know more about him. Perhaps as #3 character, he doesn’t warrant more attention.
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“beginnings” in Eye of the Needle by Ken Follett
Posted by Lew Weinstein on June 1, 2007
· Follett starts with a one page historical preface about the D-Day deception. He ends the preface … “That much is history. What follows is fiction. Still and all, one suspects something like this must have happened.” · the first chapter begins with Faber. The first clue to his identity as a spy is … “Faber watched such things – he was considerably more observant than the average railway clerk.” · in the first chapter, Faber kills his landlady, packs his transmitter, and moves on. We now know he is a German spy. The next chapter jumps to Godliman recruited to be a spycatcher.
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“point of view” in Scaramouche by Rafael Sabatini
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 26, 2007
· pov is an omniscient narrator, who sometimes interjects into the story … “nor can I discover …”
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“plot” in Scaramouche by Rafael Sabatini
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 26, 2007
· Scaramouche is more driven by plot than by character. It is an exciting adventure story, tracing a vow of revenge from one improbable escapade to another. The pace, usually rapid, is slowed from time to time by philosophical and political ruminations on the changes occurring in France at the time of the 1789 Revolution and its immediate aftermath. This transforms the story, raising its level of importance, since what the characters do impacts these epic historical events.
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“conflict” in Scaramouche by Rafael Sabatini
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 26, 2007
· The entire story is a series of obstacles for Andre-Louis to overcome. Every other character exists mainly to create such obstacles.
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“character” in Scaramouche by Rafael Sabatini
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 26, 2007
· Andre-Louis is clearly a larger-than-life character. We meet him as an obscure attorney representing Privilege, but, enraged by the murder of his friend, he embarks on a succession of spectacular careers. He becomes a political orator, with a message he does not believe. Forced to go underground, he hides in plain sight as the actor Scaramouche in a traveling cast of players. When his own actions destroy that career, he becomes a fencing master, inventing new techniques that later become the standard. Later, a member of the National Assembly drafting the constitution for the new republic of France. · Through all of his many incarnations, Andre-Louis controls his feelings with an iron determination, and we never really learn what he’s all about. Whatever he is feeling for Aline is never revealed. He is not given to introspection. · M. de Kercadiou, Andre-Louis’s godfather to Andre-Louis: “Why can’t you express yourself in a sensible manner that a plain man can understand without having to think about it?” But Andre-Louis always hides his feelings behind a veil of sarcastic humor and his self-imposed rigid Stoicism, of which he is so proud. he says many times that he is not a man of action, but this is not true. He exists almost solely through his actions, not his thoughts, and surely not his feelings.
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“beginnings” in Scaramouche by Rafael Sabatini
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 26, 2007
· first lines … “He was born with a gift of laughter and a sense that the world was mad. And that was all his patrimony. His very paternity was obscure …” … great opening, characterizing Andre-Louis and raising a question not answered until the very end of the book.
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“point of view” in Silence in Hanover Close by Anne Perry
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 25, 2007
· Perry gets us into the heads of all three of her major characters – Pitt, Charlotte and Emily – and the omniscient narrator POV allows this easily and smoothly.
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“plot” in Silence in Hanover Close by Anne Perry
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 25, 2007
· having both sisters (Charlotte and Emily) take on different hidden personas was not credible for me. In a “Society” where everybody knows everybody, it seems unlikely that either could get away with it, let alone both. But Perry is such a good story-teller that I allowed a “suspension of belief” and did not allow my incredulity to interfere with the tension that these subterfuges produced. · Perry has Charlotte, in her persona as Elizabeth Baranaby, sit quietly listening to conversation and asking herselp a series of questions. This helps the reader keep straight what is known and yet unknown about a complicated plot. Similar to what I did when Detective Watson complied a list of unanswered questions in A Good Conviction.
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“pace” in Silence in Hanover Close by Anne Perry
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 25, 2007
· Pitt asks one very short question after another, each one 2-5 words. This not only shows his investigative style, it moves the background process swiftly along. · Perry frequently alternates family scenes with investigative scenes, breaking the tension, showing more of what Pitt cares about
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“endings” in Silence in Hanover Close by Anne Perry
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 25, 2007
· the ending, which I will not reveal, is, in my view, too quickly rendered, not quite believeable, and has nothing to do with the aspects of treason which Maass says took this book to a breakout level. It is also, however, a total surprise which ties together all of the unexplained threads that have puzzled the reader, and in Perry’s sure hand it actually works quite well. I’m ready for the next book in the series.
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“dialogue” in Silence in Hanover Close by Anne Perry
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 25, 2007
· Constable Lowther speaks in a heavy dialect, which is difficult to understand. The only reason this works is that he is a minor character, so you can struggle through. If Pitt spoke that way, it would be a good reason to put the novel down. · Veronica is responding to her mothr-in-law Mrs. York … “Oh, I think the people are quite different also,” Veronica argued. “Argued” is much better than” said,” suggesting the tension between the two women.
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“conflict” in Silence in Hanover Close by Anne Perry
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 25, 2007
· “Ballarat disliked Pitt and resented his manner, which he considered insolent.” … we know early on (p3) that Pitt’s boss doesn’t like him, and we sense why. This enmity between the two turns out to be of real significance as the story unfolds. · Mobray was “told … by the powers that be as I should keep to me place …” Pitt will not have a clear path with this investigation. Shortly after, Mobray tells Pitt, “Don’t envy you.” Pitt says to himself … “Damn Ballarat and the Foreign Office.” · “It took him a quarter of an hour to persuade the right officials and finally to reach the department where Robert York had worked until the time of his death.” Pitt overcomes a small obstacle, suggesting that perhaps he will overcome the larger obstacles as well. · Charlotte explains to Radley how she will investigate Pitt’s case. “But will Pitt approve?” … “Thomas won’t have to know.” This is conflict coming big time. However, when Pitt finds out what Charlotte has been doing, he is so appreciative of what she has learned (about the woman in cerise being seen in the Danver house as well as the York) that he expresses no anger. Not realistic.
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“character” in Silence in Hanover Close by Anne Perry
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 25, 2007
· the characterization of Inspector Pitt begins on the first page, through the eyes of the sergeant … “He did not meet the sergeant’s conception of a senior officer … downright scruffy … the man let the force down. Still, the sergeant had heard Pitt’s name and spoke with some respect.” Is Perry writing for readers who have read the previous books, or for the reader who has not read any of the Pitt series? She must accommodate both. · Pitt feels guilty at taking the case from another man, and uncomfortable with his evasive poking around … we have an immediate (p2) sense that we are dealing with a man of exceptional integrity · “Mobray took a deep breath and sighed slowly. “The elder Mrs. York was a remarkable woman …” This begins the characterization of Mrs. York, who turns out to be a lot more sinister than Mobray’s infatuation would suggest. · Pitt’s interrogation technique changes from simple questions to complex, and he immediately trips up the Foreign Service officer he is questioning. We are impressed that he is a skillful detective. · “Ballarat … was the antithesis of the disheveled Pitt, whose every garment was at odds with another …” … characterization repeated for emphasis. Why did Perry choose this means of describing Pitt? Does his manner of dress play an actual role in his subsequent actions? For all this emphasis, it should, but I don’t recall that it does. · Charlotte is first mentioned on p17. Her first words are “Any interesting cases?” If the reader is familiar with the series, this would be in character with earlier stories. If not, it serves to set her character and an important aspect of their relationship in just 3 words. · Emily, who will be such a major player in this story, is briefly mentioned, but not truly introduced until p29. The initial characterization of her starts out as a description, from Emily’s perspective, of her recently murdered husband George, but evolves in a few sentences into a self-characterization of her feelings for George, her wisdom, her intolerance for injustice, and her evolution into someone more like Charlotte – opinionated, quick to anger, and a fighter against “all she perceived to be wrong” even if “sometimes hasty.” A perfect setup, in one paragraph, for the role Emily will play. · “Jack Radley entered … casually dressed … his tailor was clearly his chief creditor … his smile … those remarkable eyes.” All this from Emily’s pov (which the omniscient narrator knows, tells us about Radley and Emily’s feelings for him. Next page: “his eyelashes still shadowed his cheek.” Another reference to his eyes, his individualizing feature. · Mrs. York. They are discussing the winter art exhibit at the Royal Academy, and Charlotte says she does not paint very well. “I had not supposed you to enter a work, Miss Barnaby, merely to observe.” Nasty! We don’t like Mrs. York. · Pitt’s persistence is shown in his relentless pursuit of leads, even after so many of them turn prove unproductive (at least for now).
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“beginnings” in Silence in Hanover Close by Anne Perry
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 25, 2007
· first line … “Police station, sir!” takes you right into the story. · the first hook (p2) is the opening of a 3 year old burglary case. why? why now? · the old case involves “the delicate question of a woman’s reputation, a distinguished victim from a powerful family, and treason” · “you’d better speak to Constable Lowther first; he found the body” … this case was introduced as a burglary; now we find out (p3) that it’s a murder as well … the reader’s interest is heightened.
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“plot” in The Writer’s Chapbook edited by George Plimpton
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 13, 2007
· E.L. Doctorow … as the book goes on it becomes inevitable … choices narrow … the thing picks up speed · Truman Capote … what I am trying to achieve is a voice sitting by a fireplace telling you a story on a winter’s evening · Isak Dinesen … I start with a kind of feeling of the story I will write … then come the characters and they take over, they make the story · John Irving … how can you plot a novel if you don’t know the ending first? how can you introduce a character if you don’t know how he ends up? · Norman Mailer …generally, I don’t even have a plot … my characters engage in action, and out of that action little bits of plot sometimes adhere to the narrative (I don’t believe him, he’s just shooting off his mouth) · John Mortimer … the plot and discipline of the crime novel save it from terrible traps of being sensitive and stream-of-consciousness and all that stuff … life is composed of plots · James Thurber … we’ve got all these people (in our story), now what’s going to happen … I don’t know until I start to write and find out … I don’t believe the writer should know too much of where he’s going · William Kennedy … if I knew at the beginning how the book was going to end, I would probably never finish … I knew Legs Diamond was going to die at the end of the book, so I killed him on page one
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“pace” The Writer’s Chapbook edited by George Plimpton
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 13, 2007
· Ernest Hemingway … I have tried to eliminate everything unnecessary to conveying experience to the reader. Anything you know, you can eliminate. But … if you omit something because you don’t know it, there’s a hole in your story. · James Baldwin … the goal is to write a sentence as “clean as a bone” · Georges Simenon … I cut adjectives, adverbs and every word which is there just to make an effect. Every sentence which is there just for the sentence. You have a beautiful sentence – cut it. · Elie Wiesel … I reduce 900 pages to 160 … writing is more like sculpture where you remove … you eliminate in order to make the work visible … there is a difference between a book which is 200 pages from the beginning and a book of 200 pages which began as 800 pages … the pages you remove are really there – only you don’t see them
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“endings” in Wuthering Heights by Emily Bronte
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 13, 2007
· One of the most perfect and marvelous endings in literature is the little boy, crying that he’s afraid to go across the moor because there’s a man and woman walking there.
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“character” in The Writer’s Chapbook edited by George Plimpton
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 13, 2007
· Eudora Welty … You can’t start with how people look and speak and behave and come to know how they feel. You must know exactly what’s in their hearts and minds before they ever set visible foot on the stage. You must know all, then not tell it all, or not tell too much all at once; simply the right thing at the right moment. · Samuel Butler … the Ancient Mariner would not have taken so well if it had been called The Old Sailor. · Kurt Vonnegut … make your characters want something – right away · E.M. Forster … human beings have their great chance in the novel · John Gardner … the first thing that makes a reader read a book is the characters · Lillian Hellman … I don’t think characters turn out the way you think they are going to turn out · Aldous Huxley … fictional characters are much less complex than the people one knows · William Kennedy … what moves you forward to the next page is wondering why he or she acted in this particular way … what’s most interesting is not the plot … the character does something new, and then the story begins to percolate · Norman Mailer … what’s exciting is the creative act of allowing your characters to grow … to become more complex … then a character becomes a being, and a being is someone whose nature keeps shifting · Francois Mauriac … you may start with a real person, but he changes … only the secondary characters (undeveloped, the ones who don’t grow) are taken directly from life · William Styron … I try to make all of my characters “round” … it takes a Dickens to make “flat” characters come alive · William Trevor … fiction writers remember tiny little details, some of them quite malicious · Norman Mailer … one’s ignorance is part of one’s creation. If you’re creating a character whose knowledge of a subject is spotty, then perhaps your own spotty knowledge is a plus (I don’t think so).
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“beginnings” in The Writer’s Chapbook edited by George Plimpton
Posted by Lew Weinstein on May 13, 2007
· Joan Didion … What’s so hard about the first sentence is that you’re stuck with it. · Gabriel Garcia Marquez … One of the most difficult things is the first paragraph. I have spent many months on a first paragraph. In the first paragraph, you solve most of the problems with your book. The theme is defined, the style, the tone. · Philip Roth … I often have to write a hundred pages or so before there’s a paragraph that’s alive. That then becomes the first paragraph of the book. Underline all the sentences, phrases, words that are alive. write them on one piece of paper. there’s your first page. the “aliveness” sets the tone.
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“beginnings” in The Day Of The Jackal by Frederick Forsyth
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 28, 2007
· opening sentence It is cold at 6:40 in the morning of a March day in Paris, and seems even colder when a man is about to be executed by firing squad.” the precise time convinces the reader of the reality of what’s taking place. By not naming him, the reader wants to know who is being executed. And, since the reason is not given, why … from Stein on Writing
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“point of view” in The Bridge of San Luis Rey by Thornton Wilder
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 27, 2007
· the narrator is omnicsient, knowing things that were not known at the time, not even by Brother Juniper during his six years of investigation. “Yet for all his diligence Brother Juniper never knew … And I, who claim to know so much more, isn’t it possible that even I have missed the very spring within the spring?” · this narrator, who is never introduced to us, gains our trust when he says that what the people of Lima have come to believe about Dona Maria is not true, and “all real knowledge” … also when he corrects Dona Maria’s impressions of the Perichole … “It was … untrue …” · in the conversation (p 24) between Dona Maria and the Perichole, the narrator reveals the inner thoughts of both. · the Abbess has “fallen in love with an idea several centuries before its appointed appearance in the history of civilization.” The idea is the modern role of women, and the way it is disclosed reveals the perspective of the narrator, and places him in the 20th century.
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“pace” in The Bridge of San Luis Rey by Thornton Wilder
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 27, 2007
· even though it’s a short novel (117 pages), the story seems to drag, as long narrative scenes regarding Esteban and Uncle Pio are added. What does this all have to do with the collapse of the bridge, and with Brother Juniper, who has totally diappeared from the story?
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“endings” in The Bridge of San Luis Rey by Thornton Wilder
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 27, 2007
· the Abbess “had felt not only the breath of old age against her cheek, but also a graver warning” (the lack of a successor) … foreboding establishes tension … will she accomplish her life’s work? This question never again addressed until the final pages of the story, when it is beautifully resolved. “the search (for a successor) ended with Pepita” who later dies in the gorge, to be replaced, as we are surprised to learn in the last pages, by Perichole and Dona Clara. · God’s plan is seen in these new assistants for the Abbess’s worthy efforts, each of them coming to the Abbess because of their own losses in the same accident. Dona Clara lost her mother, Perichole lost Uncle Pio and her son Jaime, and the Abbess lost Pepita and Esteban. Soon we shall all die, we are told, and memory of us “will have left the earth.” But the “love will have been enough,” and all “impulses of love return to the love that made them,” ie to God. · last sentence … “There is a land of the living and a land of the dead, and the bridge is love, the only survival, the only meaning.”
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“conflict” in The Bridge of San Luis Rey by Thornton Wilder
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 27, 2007
· between Dona Maria and her daughter Dona Clara, who “barely glanced at the letters.” · between the twin brothers Manuel and Esteban over Manuel’s love for the Perichole. · between the Perichole and Uncle Pio, as she grows too much a lady to be seen with the man who had everything to do with her success.
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“character” in The Bridge of San Luis Rey by Thornton Wilder
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 27, 2007
· Dona Maria – characterized both by the derision of Perichole and the theater audience, and her own unawareness of what is happening, and then immediately after by her sad (pathetic) letter to her daughter · Pepita – first characterized by her kindness to Dona Maria in the theater · Pepita’s letter, read by Dona Maria, is her first attempt to express herself to the Abbess, “her first stumbling misspelled letter in courage.” Pepita tears up the letter, and soon sets out with Dona Maria for the bridge. The Abbess will never know Pepita’s first steps of growth toward the mature personality the Abbess has worked so hard to create.
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“beginnings” in The Bridge of San Luis Rey by Thornton Wilder
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 27, 2007
· first sentence … “On Friday noon, July the twentieth, 1714, the finest bridge in all Peru broke and precipitated five travellers into the gulf below” … specificity provides versimilitude. · the fact that the “finest bridge” collapsed suggests something out of the ordinary, some unseen hand. (Stein)
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“conflict” in Write Away by Elizabeth George
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 25, 2007
· plots must have conflict · Events occur as the conflict unfolds · Conflict is a form of collision · Conflict can be created by resistance against a character’s desires. Resistance can come from within the character himself, from nature · Conflict adds tension to the novel · The story’s conflicts are reflections of the theme · Put your characters into conflict · Look for subplots (which provide opportunities for conflict) based on character’s strengths and weaknesses · Opening scene either possesses or promises excitement, intrigue, conflict, foreshadows problems; establishes atmosphere, place, some characters (not necessarily the main characters) · Characters are interesting in their conflict, misery, unhappiness, confusion; not their joy and security · What does the character do when under stress? · conflict is what brings characters to life and makes them real for the reader · Put the character to the test by putting him into conflict; he then springs to life, forced to make a decision, to act on that decision · create a situation where the characters are bonded together and are unable to escape being in conflict with each other; then “heat” the situation · conflict is a character’s will in collision with something else · a character’s inner conflict will show that he is real · conflict works best when it is rising conflict, builds over time, reveals more facets of character as incidents occur · start with an idea that contains one of: the primary event, the arc of the story (beginning, middle, end), or an intriguing situation that suggests a cast of characters in conflict · Every scene must have conflict. Begin at the low point, let the tension rise to a climax, then provide a resolution which propels the entire novel forward. · foreshadow future conflict with the present dialogue · after writing dialogue, evaluate it. does it add tension? does it demonstrate conflict between characters?
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“point of view” in The Instrument by John O’Hara
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 23, 2007
· O’Hara uses an omniscient narrator. Had he used 1st person (Yank) he would have been forced to write a far more interesting story.
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“plot” in The Instrument by John O’Hara
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 23, 2007
· we never get to know what’s actually in either of Yank’s plays. O’Hara provides scant detail, probably because he never thought it through himself. Yank uses the people in his life to feed the characters in his plays, which could have been very interesting, if we had been allowed to see it happening. · BIO NOTE: John O’Hara received high critical acclaim for his short stories, more than 200 of which appeared in The New Yorker. But it was mainly his novels, though mostly of dubious literary merit, that won him the attention of Hollywood. Their focus on ambition, class conflict, money, troubled marriages, and promiscuity was the stuff of film melodrama in mid-20th century America. These plots seem trite and barren today, all surface and no depth.
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“endings” in The Instrument by John O’Hara
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 23, 2007
· Yank has not grown at all, remaining the same totally self-absorbed (but honest) person he was when the story started. There was never any reason to feel any emotion towards him. · Yank has used other people and when he had gotten what he could from them, he moved on. This began with Jiggs, who saved his life, and continued with the string of women. He ends, after Zena’s suicide, confessing to himself that, without Zena, he would never again write anything as good. · LAST LINE: “Unless, of course, he could find someone else.” · So we are left with Yank Lucas, writer of plays, incapable of feeling emotion except in the characters his talent (his “instrument” ?) creates for the stage. Hollow.
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“character” in The Instrument by John O’Hara
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 23, 2007
· in the dialogue … Jiggs to Yank … “I never saw such a miserable, ungrateful bastard in my whole life.” · O’Hara has characters ask each other questions. Jiggs to Yank: “are you a writer?” Ellis Walton (the producer) to Yank … “Where is your home town?” (Ellis asks this out of nowhere) … “What do your people do?” … “Have you ever been married?” … “What was your wife like?” … “Why did you happen to marry her, if you don’t mind my asking?” (finally, Ellis realizes that his questions are intrusive … but he keeps on asking) … “And what finally broke it up?” This is a lazy dubious approach to characterization. · New characters are often introduced first in the conversation of other characters. Yank and Ellis Walton discuss (and begin to characterize) Zena Gollum, David Salmon, and Barry Payne before we meet them. · characterization is provided through the eyes of a minor character (only possible with an omniscient narrator) … “The porter sized him up …” · Yank’s self awareness: “I’m a genius now, but ten plays from now I may not even be good.”
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“beginnings” in The Instrument by John O’Hara
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 23, 2007
· O’Hara’s first two chapters (50 pages) are a nice setup for what (I hope) will follow. Interesting characters are introduced, the primary event takes place (the production of Yank Lucas’ play), and a whole range of expectations of interesting story line are established. There has been no mention of what the “instrument” is. · first paragraph … “Yank Lucas fell asleep late one night and left the gas burning on the kitchen range. … when the water boiled over … extinguished the flame … the odor of gas … Jiggs knocked on the door.” · I read The Instrument because Sol Stein quoted this first line in his Stein on Writing. Would that Mr. Stein had commented on the rest of the book.
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“beginnings” in The Club Dumas by Arturo Perez-Reverte
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 16, 2007
· opening scene. man hanging, suicide or murder? connection to Dumas Three Musketeers ... very well done. intriguing · opening line. “The flash projected the outline of the hanged man onto the wall.” … a powerful visual image
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“point of view” in The Club Dumas by Arturo Perez-Reverte
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 16, 2007
· inconsistent narrator. How can Boris Balkan, the knowledgeable narrator of the Dumas part of the story, continue to function as narrator after the April 1 meeting of the Club Dumas, when the story now switches totally to the other narrative, in which he is not involved and knows nothing? · the narractor seems to be a minor character who interacts with Corso, so he is really telling the story from what Corso has told him. Why not have Corso narrate in 1st person? I wonder if Perez-Reverte thought of doing it that way.
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“endings” in The Club Dumas by Arturo Perez-Reverte
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 16, 2007
· unresolved issues. At the end of the book, there are major unresolved issues, which are not even acknowledged by Perez-Reverte. Who is the green-eyed girl? Why does she follow Corso and help him? What happens to Varo Borja, who has committed murders but is not (yet) sought by the police? Is this effective? I find it frustrating. Did I miss something? · two stories. what seems like two unrelated stories intertwined and soon to become a single story ends up to be two separate stories. Perez-Reverte is playing with the reader, which angers me. I came to the end of the book with great anticipation that the threads would be tied up and then felt great disappointment when they were not. · the forged page … At the end of the book, there is an implication that the Ceniza brothers did in fact forge a page, at Corso’s request, thus preventing Varo Borja from achieving his contact with the devil. This page was never shown or mentioned before, or if it was, I missed it. There must have been a better (more clear) way to present this, so perhaps the author wanted it to be unclear, maybe to be thought of long after finishing the book. But he leaves unexplained why Corso would have thought to have the page forged, and for what purpose, at the point in the story when this would have been done? Another frustrating aspect of the ending to this book.
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“pace” in Anna Karenina by Leo Tolstoy
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 16, 2007
· Leisurely pace …This way Tolstoy begins Anna Karenina communicates immediately that this is not a novel about pace, but will proceed in a leisurely manner to wend its way through the lives and relationships of the many characters. · Anna Karenina is widely regarded as the best novel ever written. So I’ve read over 400 pages, with another 400 to go, and I’ve had enough. The story is slow, boring even, with very little happening, and characters that are not gripping. Actually, it’s one long slow soap opera. · Tolstoy’s descriptions of places are remarkable. His interior monologues are often revealing, although too frequent and too long for my taste. · Bored, I have put Anna Karenina aside to be picked up later.
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“character” in The Club Dumas by Arturo Perer-Reverte
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 16, 2007
· characterization of Lucas Corso … brilliantly presented over a long period of time … a mercenary of the book world … talking fast … getting his hands dirty … a prodigious memory … canvas bag on shoulder (a recurring image) … steel rimmed glasses … untidy fringe of slightly graying hair … facial expressions of a rabbit (never got this … who knows what a rabbit’s facial expressions are like?) … THINGS NOT TOLD IN INITIAL DESCRIPTION: tall or short, lean or heavy, handsome or not. … bottomless pocket sof his coat … appears fragile yet solid as a concrete block … features are sharp and precise, full of angles … alert eyes … ready to express an innocence dangerous for anyone who was taken in by it … seemed slower and clumsier than he really was … looked vulnerable and defenseless … later, when you realized what had happened, it was too late to catch him … an oblique, distant laugh, with a hint of insolence … a laugh that lingers in the air after it stops … attractive to women. … (Corso would) say something casually, as if he had no opinion on the matter, slyly goading you to react … (getting you) to give out more information (than you had intended). NOTE: the adverbs are the key words. Who says don’t use adverbs? thin and hard like an emaciated wolf (ie, he is a hungry hunter) … a well-trained, patient wolf. · but then, Corso’s actions not consistent with character. Corso has been beautifully presented as dangerous both mentally and physically, someone who is not what others see him to be. This is excellent, but I’m not sure the author has then had Corso act in a way consistent with these characteristics. He acts weak and unsure, he is as often manipulated as he is the manipulator. · glasses and canvass bag as props. Corso often takes his glasses off. his vision is then limited to vague outlines. He is inseparable from his canvas bag. I found myself wondering what he would do if he were ever disconnected from either, and this does happen, on the bridge in Paris. However, the green-eyed girl retrieves both objects for him before too much damage is done. I think more could have been done with that, given all the build up. As with the resolution of major plot details, Perez-Reverte does not finish what he has started. Why?
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“endings” in The Spooky Art by Norman Mailer
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 15, 2007
· I look to find my book as I go along. · Plot comes last. · I want my conception of my characters to be deep enough that they will get me to places (which I did not plan) and where I have to live by my wits. · If the characters stay alive, and keep developing, the plot will take care of itself. · Is there a problem if the reader senses that the author doesn’t know how the plot turns out?
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“endings” in Write Away by Elizabeth George
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 15, 2007
· I always know the end in advance · after the climax comes resolution – tie up loose ends, illustrate the nature of the change that has occurred in the characters · you need to end every story you begin
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“beginnings” in Write Away by Elizabeth George
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 15, 2007
· Open up the story by asking dramatic questions (but do not answer) · primary event – that which gets the ball roiling in the novel · begin at the beginning, before the beginning, after the beginning (permits non-linear narrative … back stories) · starting just before the beginning – must have a scene that illustrates the status quo of the main characters before the primary event occurs · start before the beginning by illustrating the character’s emotional status quo; good chance of hooking the reader · start at the beginning by introducing simultaneously both the characters and the primary event … “The bodies were discovered by …” the reader is thrust immediately into the story and the characters · start after the beginning, after the primary event has occurred · In A Great Deliverance, the novel starts with a priest on a train, going to London, reacting to some important (but not revealed) event that we will later learn was the primary event of the story · Opening scene either possesses or promises excitement, intrigue, conflict, foreshadows problems; establishes atmosphere, place, some characters (not necessarily the main characters) · must hook the reader (first task is to keep the reader reading): Follett – Key to Rebecca – opening scene introduces but does not identify character, shows aspects of the character’s behavior that are intriguing, mysterious · opening – establish place by specific memorable details – atmosphere, mood, tone · opening – illuminate theme or plot or place · opening – illustrate agendas of characters
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“don’t do” in Write Away by Elizabeth George
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 15, 2007
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* “beginnings” in Anna Karenina by Leo Tolstoy
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 15, 2007
- opening sentence … “All happy families are alike; each unhappy family is unhappy in its own way.” From which we know that this is going to be a story about unhappy families (more than one).
- opening scene … Tolstoy starts (p.1) with the Oblonskys, Prince Stepan (Stiva) and Princess Darya (Dolly), who are not the main characters.
Q: Are there successful examples in more modern novels of this use of secondary characters to begin the story?
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“character” in Anna Karenina by Leo Tolstoy
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 15, 2007
· Karenin … a pathetic character, unable to act in furtherance of his own wishes, but motivated only to avoid being embarrassed by his professional and social associates. · Stiva has no money. Tolstoy shows this, when Dolly asks him for money for clothes for the children … “Tell them I’ll pay.” The reader knows he won’t. He is spending his money to buy a necklace for his actress girlfriend. · “I haven’t stopped thinking about death,” said Levin. “It’s true that it’s time to die. And that everything is nonsense. I’ll tell you truly: I value my thought and my work terribly, but in essence – think about it – this whole world of ours is just a bit of mildew that grew over a tiny plane. And we think we can have something great – thoughts, deed! They’re all grains of sand … Once you understand it clearly, everything becomes insignificant. Once you understand that you’ll die today or tomorrow and they’ll be nothing left, everything becomes so insignificant … So you spend your life diverted by hunting or work in order not to think about death.” Q: How does Tolstoy have Levin adjust these depressing thoughts to marry Kitty and have a life? A: he sees Kitty and instantly reverses everything. Characters do this often in this on-going soap opera. · from Mailer – The Spooky Art … Tolstoy is a great writer – maybe he is our greatest novelist – because no other can match his sense of human proportion. Tolstoy teaches us that compassion is of value and enriches our lives only when it is severe – when we can perceive everything that is good and bad about a character but are still able to feel that the sum is probably a little more good than awful.
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“character” in Write Away by Elizabeth George
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 15, 2007
· Analysis of character is the highest human entertainment · Human character is the greatest of puzzles · What we take away from a good novel is the memory of character · Characters effect events and events effect characters · Real people have flaws; no one wants to read about perfect characters · Issues of self-doubt · Characters who make mistakes, have lapses of judgment, experience weakness, are interesting · We want to cheer when the character (finally) comes into her own · Characters learn from unfolding events · A character is (best) revealed slowly by the writer · Characters are interesting in their conflict, misery, unhappiness, confusion; not their joy and security · begin with a name; names can suggest anything to the reader (personality traits, social and ethnic background, geography, attitude) · Names influence how a reader will feel about a character · Create an analysis of each character, facts, a full psychological profile · Do not bring a character to a book unless he or she is alive before the book begins · Create character in advance; use personality quirks and telling details; know your characters, who they are, how they’ll react · constantly ask questions about what each character would do in the situation in which he finds himself · become the character’s analyst · understand your character’s core need · What does the character do when under stress? (generally the flip of the core need) : delusions, compulsions, addictions, denial, illnesses, self-harming behavior, manias, phobias · what is the character’s attitude toward sex, what is his/her sexual history · What does the character want in the novel? · As you write, frequently refresh your memory about your characters · the behavior of a character is rooted in who that characters is and what has happened in the scene (and before) · we all suffer from guilt, fear, worry, doubt · a character’s inner conflict will show that he is real · conflict works best when it is rising conflict, builds over time, reveals more facets of character as incidents occur · at the climax, the character stands before the reader fully revealed · a reader can bond with a character if there is something in common · Every character has two landscapes: (1) external, (2) internal · External landscape: select details which will resonate with the reader · Internal landscape: emotions, wants, needs, reflections, speculations, obsessions · Allow characters to reflect – reveal what’s in their heads · characters in a novel are more interesting if they have lives outside the (action of) the novel, before the novel was written, and after. · We admire characters who face and prevail over situations we ourselves have experienced, who unflinchingly examine themselves, learn from their mistakes, meet challenges with courage
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* “character” in What Makes Sammy Run by Budd Schulberg
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 15, 2007
· Glick is characterized mainly through Manheim’s observations, and only rarely by his own words or actions. · simile … “he would come back to me panting, like a frantic puppy retrieving a ball.” · “one stupendous talent, his ability to blow his own horn.” So the die is cast for the rise of Sammy Glick. · “You know what, Mr. Manheim, these are the first brand-new shoes I ever had.” Whenever Sammy calls him Mr. Manheim, that is a signal that he is making an important statement. · Sammy’s obsession with shoes is a continuing motif, which is not explained until Manheim learns about Sammy’s family, and the too big, hand-me-down shoes (from his older brother) he had to wear as a young boy, and which were often a source of humiliation to him. · Character development. Sammy grew in superficial ways, ie, he became more successful, but his character never changed significantly. Nor did Manheim’s. At the end of the book, both were essentially the same as at the beginning. · Miss Rosalie Goldbaum. A character introduced so Sammy can throw her aside, which the reader knows instantly will happen. · Julian Blumberg. Another schlub for Sammy to throw aside? Not quite, because Julian has something Sammy will continue to need, the ability to write. · Julian is from a background similar to Sammy’s, and offers a contrasting development, taking a moral position to his own detriment that surely Sammy could never do. · Who is happier in the end? · Julian Blumberg and Kit Sargent each play their roles in the plot, but neither was allowed to realize the emotional pull that might have been possible. We were never inside their heads so we didn’t have the opportunity to really care about them, although the things that happened to them would have permitted such caring if Schulberg had wanted to go in that direction. · “It’s a good evening for me all right. But I don’t know about you, Mr. Manheim.” Sammy says Mr. Manheim, so we know this will be important. And it is. Sammy has undermined his boss and stolen 4 inches of his theater column for what soon becomes “Sammy Glick Broadcasting,” Sammy’s own column about radio. Sammy did it. It was rotten. Yet he doesn’t hide it. He comes right out and tells Manheim, being so brazen as to imply that he did it for Manheim’s benefit
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“point of view” in Write Away by Elizabeth George
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 15, 2007
· must be clear about point of view in each scene Objective viewpoint · writing is journalistic, like a reporter; provides facts, but not thoughts and feelings of characters – tough to carry off well · objective narrative can create an aura of intrigue about a character or a situation – precisely because the reader does not know inner thoughts or feelings, but it also minimizes the reader’s intimacy Omniscient viewpoint. · Must be adept to remain truly omniscient and not just slip in and out of different characters points of view · the narrator knows, sees, hears all · the narrator enters into the mind of every character · the viewpoint of the narrator is not necessarily that of the author · omniscient narrator is a story teller; the reader sinks into the story; the narrator is not confined to the time or place of the individual scene (like a reporter would be) but can provide history about the characters as well as what’s in their hearts and minds Character viewpoints. · Reveal only what the chosen character would see, know, think, feel in each scene in which the character is participating First person. · Stay with one narrator throughout the novel. In that character’s head and none other. Terrific intimacy, authenticity. BUT this one character must be in every scene, which is a challenge to plotting · Shifting first person. Multiple first character viewpoints. Each section or alternating chapters told by a different first person narrator. Challenge: each “I” must be utterly distinct · Shifting third person. NOTE: no viewpoint shift within a scene, unless … · can combine first person with shifting third person (that’s what I did in A Good Conviction) · too many narrators slows down the pace of a novel · narrator can be reliable or a devilishly clever liar, likable or not
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* “point of view” in What Makes Sammy Run by Budd Schulberg
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 15, 2007
· The entire story is about Sammy Glick, but everything is told through the eyes of Al Manheim. When something occurs that Schulberg wants the reader to know, but Manheim wasn’t there, he has the person who was there (usually Glick) tell Manheim what happened. These sections are in italic.
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“plot” in Write Away by Elizabeth George
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 15, 2007
· plots should not insult reader’s intelligence, no holes in plots, characters who are real · create subplots that illustrate the same theme through different situations · every scene advances either the plot or one of the subplots (or it doesn’t belong) · using a piece of information from the character analysis, twist the story one more time · keep aware of what the reader knows or doesn’t know at each point in the story · Ask questions about each character · Work with your characters to design the plot · Plot is what characters do to deal with the situation they are in · primary event – that which gets the ball roiling in the novel · Events must be organized with an emphasis on causality · The first event (scene) triggers the event that will immediately follow it · High drama: direct conflict between characters, discovery, revelation, personal epiphany · Plot must have climax, and climax itself must have a climax · Post climax comes resolution – tie up loose ends, illustrate the nature of the change that has occurred in the characters · Open up the story by asking dramatic questions (but do not answer) · I always know the end in advance · subplots arise out of a novel’s theme, mirror the theme · you need to end every story you begin · theme – the basic truth about which you are writing. · you may not know the theme in advance, but it will emerge (???) · the writer’s object is to keep the reader reading · if a plot is essentially believable, it can sustain a suspension of belief · every story needs plot points, critical moments when events change
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“beginnings” in What Makes Sammy Run – Budd Schulberg (1941)
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 15, 2007
· first paragraph. “The first time I saw him, he couldn’t have been more than sixteen years old, a little ferret of a kid, sharp and quick. Sammy Glick. Used to run copy for me. Always ran. Always looked thirsty.” Brilliant. Tells a lot about Glick and also about Manheim. · first chapter. 28 pages. Sets the stage beautifully. Gets right into the story. Conflicts established. Sets reader’s desire to know more. Great beginning.
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“endings” in What Makes Sammy Run by Budd Schulberg
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 14, 2007
· Sammy’s comeuppance. I expected more. I’m not sure what, but more. It’s hard to imagine Sammy upset with his runaround wife for very long. Upset at younger men nipping at his heels, for sure, but poking his wife, I don’t think so. He didn’t love her, and he would get over the embarrassment, probably find a way to turn it to advantage. · He’s not happy. He’s never going to be happy. But ‘happy’ wasn’t ever his goal. Money and power were his goals. · He was never portrayed as introspective enough to understand and be upset at what his life had become, and since he did not ‘grow’ over the course of the book, we never got a sense that his original goals might have changed or even be questioned. We sense the incompleteness of his life, but does he? · Perhaps Schulberg was too close to the film industry and some of its major players to go any further than he did in dramatizing the essential emptiness of the success driven life. · I never cried for Sammy Glick.
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* “don’t do” in The Spooky Art by Norman Mailer
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 9, 2007
- The moment you moralize in your novel, your book is no longer moral. It has become pious, and piety corrodes morality.
- Don’t go into your protagonist’s thoughts until you have something to say about his inner life that is more interesting than the reader’s suppositions
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* process … in Write Away by Elizabeth George
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 9, 2007
· learning something new in writing the novel is a source of energy for the writer · the original idea prompts questions which expand the simple idea into a more complicated story idea · next is research; identify what needs to be learned in order to tell the story · research the specific locations where the story will take place · details about where the characters live adds verisimilitude · specific details: kinds of shops, kinds of houses, types of trees and plants, sounds, smells · take camera and tape recorder on research hikes. Photograph constantly and speak notes onto tape. Transcribe notes every night. · Talk to people, tape record everything · next: create characters – generic list – names! The name of the character is the first chance to position the reader’s attitude toward that character. · Say the character’s name aloud – the reader will. · Write freely about each character, touching every area of their development and lives; develop a voice for each character; 3-4 page document on each character. What drives that character? · Re-read these character analyses when writing. · the deeper the character analyses, the more plot elements jump out · consider how characters’ lives interlock, what the subplots might be · doing the character analysis first allows the writing to be about art and not about craft. · Having created all of the characters, I know their worlds and can create exact settings (not generic) for each · render the setting with as much authenticity as the characters and events · create settings – plan physical layout – each building, connections · develop a place I can own on paper, so the reader can experience the setting · step outline – quickly list all the events in the story that can be generated from the primary event and that have causal relationships between them · place these events in the best dramatic order – an order that allows the story to keep opening up and not shutting down · make sure I maintain dramatic questions and do not play my hand too soon · running plot outline – a present tense account of what’s going to happen in a scene, including point of view, stream of consciousness, how can I bring it to life · bullet points for each scene · I see the scene playing out in my mind – do this for every scene in the step outline · rough draft – having done all the advance work, I can now involve myself in the sheer artistry of writing · there are surprises and changes – new ways to steer the story, new elements, new dramatic questions, new ideas · move back and forth – step outline, running plot outline, actual writing – write 5 pages per day · read the hard copy of the rough draft; make no changes in the text; make notes about weaknesses, repetitions, places where story is not clear, where character does not emerge well · I write myself an editorial letter, a guide to the 2nd draft · write 2nd draft on the hard copy (not computer, can’t see it all at once on computer); about 50 pages per day · revise manuscript; give to cold reader for an honest evaluation; with two sets of questions, one to have before reading and one to see after reading. · Take comments, 3rd draft, send to editor · Writing is a job like any other · 195. mentions Richard Marek · 196. examine every facet of character’s lives, needs, personalities, behavior prior to writing a single word of the novel · write a minimum of 5 pages per day · write every day (even on vacation) – stay situated in the novel – my novels are large, long and complicated · Clear your life of the things that keep you from writing
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“dialogue” in Write Away by Elizabeth George
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 9, 2007
· A character’s dialogue illustrates opinions, personality, education, economic background, attitudes, beliefs, superstitions, pathology · Wield dialogue as a way of banishing doubt from the reader’s mind · Dialogue can foreshadow events that will not take place until well into the story · relationships take on life through dialogue · natural speech isn’t fluid. Writing like that would be virtually unreadable · Dialogue needs to seem natural even when it can’t be · syntax reveals character: pedantic speech, casual speech, uneducated speech · a character may have a signature word (or expression) · each character has a distinctive way of using language · dialogue needs to be concise · dialogue should never be obviously expository · dialogue is not supposed to be the way people talk all the time · subtext – what the characters are really talking about beneath what they appear to be talking about · to offset the direct nature of dialogue with minimal (or no) subtext (St. James and Deborah often speak directly, trusting each other), which would become repetitive and tedious, you need to have other scenes in which the dialogue is rich with subtext (Lynley and Helen rarely speak directly and often speak at cross purposes). · a lot is going on, and much of it is not expressed · subtext colors the scene. People don’t always say what they really mean. They don’t always state their thoughts and feelings directly. Sometimes they talk around a topic · fancy tag lines such as snarl, moan, whine, growl (instead of said, asked, answered, replied) call attention to themselves. EG discourages using them at all. The reader will know if someone is snarling without obvious words to say so · Adverbs can add a degree of precision, but draw reader’s attention to how the line is said rather than what is said · Junk words. Use them only if they illustrate character. Otherwise delete. · Suggest dialect rather than using full dialect. The reader will get it. · In a long speech, maintain attention by showing other characters’ reactions, gestures. · Interrupt the speech with a moment of thematically related action – sound of voices, wind against the windowpane, song on the radio in car which passes by. · Intersperse some physical thing into the stream of dialogue (may reveal character, contain important information, be a metaphor) · Indirect dialogue is a summarized form of dialogue, told in narrative style, which alters the pacing of the scene, compresses the dialogue while still allowing the reader to know that it was lengthy. · after writing dialogue, evaluate it. Does it add tension? Demonstrate conflict between characters? Reveal some aspect of the character speaking or listening? · Would some of the dialogue be more effective as indirect rather than direct? · If the dialogue isn’t essential, get rid of it!
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“voice” in Write Away by Elizabeth George
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 9, 2007
· voice is the tone that comes through the narrative when the point-of-view character is on stage · voice comes from the character analysis you’ve created; if you’ve designed characters who come to life, highlighting the salient aspects of their personalities allows their voices to emerge · a character’s voice comes from his background, education, position in society, personal and family history, prejudices and biases, inclinations and desires, belief system, what he wants for his life, his agenda in an individual scene, his arching purpose, his core need · voice: use of language, vocabulary, attitude · we’re inside his head, living the scene through him · attitude reveals character · reader can recognize connections to a character or can recognize that the character is very different (curiosity piqued?)
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“plot” in The Spooky Art by Norman Mailer
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 9, 2007
· a novel is most alive when one can trace the disasters which follow victory or the subtle turns that sometimes come from a defeat. · to know what you want to say is not the best condition for writing a novel. novels go happiest when you discover something you didn’t know: an insight into one of your more opaque characters, a metaphor that startles you even as you are setting it down, a truth that used to elude you. · we live in and out of ongoing, and discontinuous, plots · our love of plot comes from our need to find the chain of cause and effect that so often is missing in our own existence · I look to find my book as I go along. Plot comes last. I want my conception of my characters to be deep enough that they will get me to places (which I did not plan) and where I have to live by my wits. If the characters stay alive, and keep developing, the plot will take care of itself. · most of our lives are spent getting ready for dramatic moments that don’t take place. · I no longer make up a master plan before I begin a novel. some of my best ideas come because I haven’t fixed my novel’s future in concrete. I want to keep the feeling that I didn’t know how it was going to turn out. I prefer a story that develops out of the writing. · Characters (who are alive) need to fulfill their own perverse and surprising capabilities. · I don’t do my research too far ahead of where I am in the novel. · if you get a good novel going, you have a small universe functioning, living in relation to its own scheme of cause and effect. · Planning too carefully makes it almost impossible for one of your characters to go through a dramatic shift of heart. · the artist seeks to create a spell … a feeling that he knows something deeper than his normal comprehension … a sense of one-ness · both artists and scientists are trying to penetrate into the substance of things · coincidences occur … exciting us with a livid sense that there’s a superstructure about us, and in this superstructure there are the agents of a presence larger than our imagination. · stories bring order to the absurdity of reality. Relief is provided by the narrative’s beginning, middle and end. · In analyzing novels, consider each major character, and describe where he was at the beginning of the story, where he ended up, and how he got there. · Jorge Borges has a magical ability to put plots through metamorphoses, thus posing the difficulty of comprehending reality. · writing a novel is creating a world, God-like, presumptuous, intoxicating, never comfortable.
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“point of view” in The Spooky Art by Norman Mailer
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 9, 2007
· in the 1st person, you gain immediacy but lose insight, because you can’t move into other people’s heads. · in the 3rd person, you are God, ready to see into everyone’s mind, enter into every character’s consciousness. · 1st person cannot be as free as the separation between author and protagonist offered by the 3rd person.
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* “character” in The Spooky Art by Norman Mailer
Posted by Lew Weinstein on April 9, 2007
· Tolstoy teaches us that compassion is of value and enriches our lives only when it is severe – when we can perceive everything that is good and bad about a character but are still able to feel that the sum is probably a little more good than awful. · an author needs to ask himself constantly if he is being fair to his characters. · we are relatively unfamiliar with the cunning of the strong and the stupid. We tend to know too little of how the world works. those who do real work tend not to write, and writers who explore the minds of such men approach from an intellectual stance that distorts their vision. · seek to apply what I know about political power, finance, and management to my portrayal of Lorenzo de Medici. Imagine how he feels about what he does, or does not do. · never be satisfied with (the way you are presenting) any of your characters, even when they have come alive for you. unless your characters keep growing through (their response to) the events of the book, your novel can go nowhere that can surprise you.· if the character does not grow, there is no place to go but into the plot · the creative act of allowing (demanding?) your characters to grow is the real excitement of writing. your characters become as complex as real people. But what if they don’t grow, and you don’t bring out the beauty you initially perceived. · if you get a good novel going, you have a small universe functioning, living in relation to its own scheme of cause and effect. Planning too carefully makes it almost impossible for one of your characters to go through a dramatic shift of heart. · don’t go into your protagonist’s thoughts until you have something to say about his inner life that is more interesting than the reader’s suppositions. · protagonists are always moving between choices, while the author monitors those decisions. · there are points in the course of fashioning a character where you recognize that you don’t know enough about the person you are trying to create. At such times, I take it for granted that my unconscious knows more than I do. · any person studied in depth will prove fascinating. · stories bring order to the absurdity of reality. Relief is provided by the narrative’s beginning, middle and end. · In analyzing novels, consider a major character, and describe where he was at the beginning of the story, where he ended up, and how he got there.
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